Sandfire//Shadowclan

[***Hawkstar***]

Name :: Sandfire
Gender- She-cat
Age :: 15 moons
Position :: Medicine cat
Clan :: ShadowClan
Appearance :: Sandfire is a yellow tabby with a white chest and paws. Her eyes are a stunning ocean blue color. Her ears and curved and small, and her eyes are almond-shaped.
Personality :: Sandfire is strong, and likes to help others. She is determined and liked to learn, but at the same time, she's fun. She enjoys flattery, and is quite calm most of the time. She is curious to the extreme.
History :: Sandfire was born in a litter of three. Her littermates were one brother and one sister, out of whom she was the youngest. She was always mocked by her family because of that. Several moons later, Sandfire's sister died from a badger attack. Her brother died, too, only a couple moons later, when he hunted on ThunderClan territory. She was given her name because her pelt looked like the color of sand; it still does. She was made a full Medicine Cat 2 moons ago.
Other Relationships :: None, currently.

MODIFIED BY iRAVENPELT

[.::Lilystar::.]

Try to run your senstences together more. They're really choppy. Kind of like, "Fred ran. Fred jumped. Fred landed. Then Fred left." I think they're choppy because you're trying to put the amount of sentences needed at the WCARPG site. We need less here.
Also, watch your capitals, sorry-pet peeve of mine. >.<

[iRavenpelt]

xD I'll modify it for her; the sentences and the capitals. It will make the sentences less choppy, although it might mean it's under the limit. =/

[iRavenpelt]

There. That's better. :3 Accepted!